Writing Tips–Show Don’t Tell

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It’s Writing Tip Wednesday so here goes…

Show don’t tell is the first rule of fiction writing! So, why wasn’t it my first writing tip instead of second? I haven’t got a clue other than POV was on my mind. Anyway…show don’t tell is what will bring your story alive for your readers. It will put them in the middle of the story so they are experiencing the story rather than have someone telling them the story.

Showing:  Brings the reader into the action. They experience what the character is experiencing

Telling:  Telling is a summary of the event. It’s the way you tell someone about a movie or something that happened to you.

A good writer uses both showing and telling.

A great writer knows when to use showing and when to use telling.

One of the things I noticed with novice writers is that they often bring the reader to the point of a crisis, then suddenly transport the reader to an innocuous scene, such as at the kitchen table sipping coffee. Then the character thinks back to the crisis event and what happened.

Wrong!

That robs the reader of all the emotions of the scene. You never, never, never want to use telling during the pivotal action scenes. That’s when you want to stretch out each agonizing detail. Bring in all the senses, not just hearing and seeing. Try to include smell, touch, and taste. And don’t forget to add in emotions as well.

One clue that you might be telling when you should be showing is if you find yourself writing a flashback to an earlier scene so the reader knows what happened. Chances are you should go back to that scene and show it not tell about it later.

NO-NO: Telling: Her wedding was story book perfect except for the fact that her husband-to be-passed out before they could be wed.
YES-YES: Showing: Her little sister tossed the rose petals from side to side. When she reached the front she turned and waved. This was the moment that Allie had been waiting for her whole life. She tightened her grip on her father’s arm and slowly proceeded down the aisle. Tears filled her eyes as she saw all her family and friends watching her and smiling.

She looked up to the front of the church. She smiled at her handsome husband-to-be. He smiled back but then swayed. In slow motion, he crumpled to the floor.

The key to good writing is to find the balance between showing and telling. Too much showing makes the book too boring. Not enough showing makes the book too boring. And the way to find the balance is….practice–practice–practice.

Hope this helps!

Please share with the rest of us if you have a question or want to share your own examples of showing and telling!

UNTIL NEXT TIME…GOD BLESS  & GOOD READING! (AND GOOD WRITING!)

 

 

 

 

 

My Writing Journey–Writing My First Novel

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Last week I brought you up to my light bulb moment of deciding I should try to write a novel.  (If you missed it, check it out in the archives.) I knew nothing about writing books except what I knew from reading books all my life soooo….I sat down at my computer. Yes, we really did have computers back then!

And I wrote my story. I didn’t tell anyone I was writing a novel, I just did it! It took me a full year to complete that first draft of my first novel–Stolen Memories.

When I was finished, I shared it with my Book Club. Mostly they were excited that I wrote it and had positive things to say. And a few pointed out ways for me to improve it. All in all, it was a positive experience, but I wanted to learn more about writing. That meant finding books about writing.

For the next few years, I read books and learned about writing techniques and I wrote and I wrote.. and I…you get my point.  Somewhere in that time I got bitten by the writing bug.  I loved creating stories and characters. At this point it never occurred to me to try to get the books I was wring  published. I simply enjoyed the writing and wanted to be good at it.

Now after writing for 19 years and having 9 books published, I look back at that first novel….and cringe! There were so many things I did wrong in that book. Here’s a few:

Started with a dream sequence. I’ve since learned this a BIG pet peeve of many agents and editors.

The main character had amnesia-another pet peeve of a lot of agents/editors.

I had no idea what POV was so head hopping was plentiful! (If you don’t know what this is check last week’s writing tips.)

As far as the quality of writing, I can’t really say since I haven’t read any of my early manuscripts since becoming a better writer. But I suspect that wasn’t all that good either. But I kept writing and kept studying books about writing. I wrote at least three more novels (all about the same character) and probably a few others.

One day as I was sitting at my computer, I had a thought–a very scary thought.

Maybe other people would like to read my stories!

Wow, I had no idea how scary that thought really was!

Writers, share one of your mistakes you made as you wrote your first novel.

Readers, tell us the truth now, would you like to be a writer? If so, why?

UNTIL NEXT TIME…GOD BLESS & GOOD READING!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

WRITING TIPS-Understanding Point of View

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I’ve decided to introduce a new segment on the blog–WRITING TIPS. So each week (or I hope so), I’ll introduce a topic and give some advice about it. Along with my advice,  This is supposed to be an interactive segment. So if you want to add your two cents worth, go for it. If you have a question about the topic, ask it! I’ll try to answer it or find someone who can.

This week’s topic–UNDERSTANDING POINT OF VIEW.

This is a crucial skill that all writer’s must master  if you want to write excellent book. And isn’t that what we all want!

Point of View refers to the person whose head you are in as you read the scene. You hear what they hear, you see what they see, you feel and smell what they do, and you can ONLY know what their thoughts are.  So when your POV (that’s point of view) character says a snappy comment, we can’t know what the other person thinks about that. The POV character might guess at what the other person is thinking but that’s as far as it goes!

The current writing rule is one POV character per scene. If you bounce from one character’s POV to another in the same scene that’s called head-hopping and that’s a big no-no these days. That wasn’t always the case, but it is now. Once upon a time we would know what each character in the scene was thinking, planning, scheming or feeling but no more.

The trend could change, of course, and it wouldn’t bother me a bit if it did! I read a book by a very–very–very famous writer and he did a lot of head hopping. I’m not sure if that’s the case with his other books, but I must admit it did take away from the enjoyment of the book. At least for me.

Here’s a very quick example of head-hopping and how to fix it:

NO-NO:  Lil hoped Ronny would love the cake she baked. After all it was his mother’s recipe. She handed him the plate and watched as he took a bite. Ronny couldn’t believe what he was tasting. It was horrible nothing like his mother’s.

FIX: Lil hoped Ronny would love the cake she baked. After all it was his mother’s recipe. She handed him the plate and watched as he took a bite. Ronny scooped a huge bite and popped it in his mouth. He smiled, then chewed. After a moment, he grabbed up his napkin and spit into it. What had she done wrong?

Can you see the difference in the two scenes? In the first you have thoughts from both characters. In the second, you only have Lil’s thoughts. But you can still very clearly know what Ronny thinks about the cake.

Now, it’s your turn to share your thoughts about Point of View or to ask a question if you have one.

 

UNTIL NEXT TIME…GOD BLESS & GOOD READING (AND GOOD WRITING!)

 

 

 

 

Another Book Blast & A Chance To Win An Amazon Gift Card!

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Service Station Angel
By Lisa J. Schuster

About the Book:

Sometimes God places you in a situation of great perplexity, but you perceive His intentions are premeditated and purposeful. Do you trust His lead?

“Be still before the Lord and wait patiently for him; do not fret when people succeed in their ways, when they carry out their wicked schemes.” – Psalms 37:7 (NIV)

Ernie Price is a middle-aged, humble-hearted man who owns and operates a service station in a rural Midwest town in Upper Michigan, back in a time when full service was the only service, and you got your windows cleaned and your tires pumped for free.

Ernie’s life has been a reflection of God’s love, giving of himself fully and graciously to people in the community and his church. As music director for the children’s choir or hosting the yearly Christmas party for the less-fortunate children in town, Ernie impacted lives and was loved by many.

When trouble rocks the small town and Ernie is physically incapacitated to offer his help, the community is left to pick up the pieces, mourn, and move on, while Ernie wrestles with the spiritual questions of his accident:

My glimpse of heaven is for what purpose on earth?

Why do I feel compelled to help this stranger know the love of the Lord? Who is this stranger anyway?

This heartwarming story of love, faithful forgiveness and following God’s perfect plan, will inspire and delight!

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80c6dd3e31f90a82390bef.L._V366868119_SX200_Faith, family and friends inspired Lisa J. Schuster to write again and God nudged her to publish her first novel, Service Station Angel. She believes the words in this book are her service to others, so that they may find joy and comfort during a season of time when they need it most. “May your hand reach up towards His so that you may touch another with Jesus’ abundant love,” prays Lisa.

Lisa lives in Highlands Ranch, Colorado with her husband and two children. She enjoys creative writing, traveling, working with inner city youth, bible study groups, singing and theater.

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My Writing Journey–How I Started Writing?

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OK, I admit I don’t really like talking about myself all the time. And that’s part of the reason I struggle to find things to put on this blog. I asked for advice over the weekend on Facebook about what my friends would like to see on any writer’s blog. And one of the answers was to write more about my own writing life.

DUH!  That makes a lot of sense. Why didn’t I think of it. So over the next few weeks or however long it takes,  I’ll share a little about my writing journey. PART ONE is today–How I Started Writing:

I’ve always loved books. Once I learned to read, I carried a book with me everywhere I went. And I do mean everywhere. To my aunt’s and uncle’s. To the doctor’s office. In the car when we were going some place. Even to the creeks and lakes where we went to fish. Of course, I didn’t fish. I read my books instead.

And yes, I was one of those kids who  tried to get away with  reading in class or even after I went to bed.

So the first step in my journey to become a writer was to read, read, and read some more!

As much as I loved books, it never really occurred to me to write books.

But I was a life-long fantasizer. And no I don’t mean sex fantasies!

As a child, I would make up characters in my head and create little lives for them. I would act them out with Barbie and Ken or Mr. and Mrs. Potato Head.

Even as an adult, I continued this little quirk.

Perhaps, the first inkling that I was meant to be a writer came when a friend of mine named Mary and I would read the same books and then critique them. And discuss how we could have made the book better by doing this or that.

The lightbulb moment came soon after I celebrated my 40th birthday. As many 40 year olds are prone to do I was searching for….something more in my life. (And I don’t think it’s a coincidence that my spiritual journey to reunite with God started at about the same time.)

Anyway…I was watching some TV show. I think it was Oprah. That talked about writing your own obituary. Not just any obituary but one that included all sorts of “fantastic” things that you hadn’t done. It seemed a little silly, but…I did it anyway!

At the same time, I was reading a book called SIMPLE ABUNDANCE. One segment of the book was about creativity and how we all yearn for creating something in our life. Made sense, but I didn’t consider myself creative.

Anyway…back to my obituary. In it, I wrote that I was a bestselling novelist!

Really? I had never written anything creatively but a few poems and hadn’t even done that for many years.

But as I read the words I’d written in that obituary something sparked inside me.

And a writer was born!

More about my writing journey next week.

HOW ABOUT YOU? HAVE YOU EVER WRITTEN YOUR OWN OBITUARY? WHAT CRAZY THINGS DID YOU PUT IN IT? DID IT CHANGE YOUR LIFE THE WAY IT DID MINE?

 

UNTIL NEXT TIME…GOD BLESS & GOOD READING!

They’re baaaack…

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Reggie and Dylan are back in my new release, UNTIL DEATH DO US PART.  We first met them in Pursued as they met, were chased by a crazed killer, and fell in love.  Now they’re married. Happily married you ask? Well….you’ll have to read the story to find the answer to that question. But I can tell you there are plenty of hold-your-breath moments as Reggie and Dylan live out their faith–meaning helping others who are in trouble.  And trouble they find!

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 UNTIL DEATH DO US PART:

When Reggie vowed until death do us part, she had no idea how close she’d come.

Newlywed Reggie Monroe struggles to find her happily ever after. As much as she loves her husband, she finds life to be overwhelming as she attempts to be the perfect farmer’s wife in rural Ohio.

When Dylan receives a mysterious message from his best friend, he knows trouble is brewing. To keep Reggie safe, he encourages her to visit friends, but keeping secrets from Reggie is never a good idea. It only makes her more curious—and everyone knows that curiosity killed the cat!

Until Death Do Us Part becomes more than words as Reggie struggles to stay alive and reunite with her husband.

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UNTIL NEXT TIME…GOD BLESS & GOOD READING!

 

 

BUSY! BUSY! BUSY!

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Lots going on these days.  So an update is in order.

On the health front, I’m in a holding pattern as I wait for my second brain tumor to be officially declared dead. I’ve been off the steroids for a few months. I still have a few symptoms from them, but it’s getting better every day. More energy and less pain! Both good things!

I’m on a new treatment that will hopefully preserve what hearing I still have in my left ear.  I’m completely deaf in my right ear so it’s important to save what hearing I still have.  I also have severe balance problems that probably won’t go away unless God intervenes with a miracle.

AND I’M ALL FOR A MIRACLE!

On the publishing front, things are great. Even as I struggle with my health, God is blessing me in my writing career.

On Saturday, I submitted a new novel to a major publishing house.  So, I’m holding my breath and would appreciate prayers that the editor likes it. If that’s not enough I have 3 more books scheduled to be published this year. How awesome is that! UNTIL DEATH DO US PART will be out sometime this week and I’ll do a separate post on that one tomorrow.

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Then the first in my new mystery novella series will be released July 18. DEADLY COMMUNICATIONS features a crime-fighting speech pathologist! Have you ever heard of such a thing? Neither had I, but after more than 30 years of being a speech pathologist I thought it was time to meld my two passions together into one great story!

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And the last scheduled book (at least at this time) is REDEMPTION. It’s the third book in my Sisters By Choice Series. Don’t worry, you’ll hear much more about this one as the scheduled date of September 18 gets closer!  And last but not least is my last release, BETRAYED. It’s the second in the Sisters by Choice series so if you haven’t read it yet, you might want to before REDEMPTION is released.

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UNTIL NEXT TIME…GOD BLESS & GOOD READING!

ARE THEY TALKING ABOUT ME?

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Great book. First time I have read this author. She is very good.Can’t wait toread the next one.

Betrayed is the first book that I’ve read by Lillian Duncan, and I wonder how it is that I’ve missed out on this exciting author until now! Excellent suspense writer is a term that should be one of the author’s descriptives, as her newest book is so captivating that I read it in one day. 

There is nothing I can say except “an absolutely wonderful book.” I stayed up until 2 am to finish this book in 1 day. 

 

Those are a few snippets from reviews for my latest book-BETRAYED.  I don’t read reviews for my books on a regular basis so when I checked a few of them out, I was so pleased to find that readers are enjoying my latest story and taking the time to write a review. And I want to give all those who wrote a review for that book or any of my books  a very heartfelt thank you. Writing and posting reviews is a great way to help out your favorite writers and it only takes a few minutes of your time.

I have a riddle for you. What do my book reviews, my old paintings, and old pictures of me have in common?

They remind me that I don’t always view myself the way others do.

As I read my book reviews, I was so humbled that people liked the way I put the words together into a story. When I look at old paintings that I did years ago, I’m always surprised by them. I can’t believe my hands created something that pretty.  The same is true for my books and even old pictures of myself. When I look at pictures of myself from years gone by, I think, Wow–I didn’t look too bad back then. Yet I don’t remember feeling that way at the time.

Sometimes we are our own worse critics–and we shouldn’t be.

It’s not good to be arrogant and that’s not what I’m proposing, but I think far more of us are too hard on ourselves. We need to take a step back and view us as others view us. One way to do that is to believe people when they give us a compliment us. Instead of disagreeing with them, a simple thank you will suffice!

So, what about you? Are you surprised at how good you look in old pictures? Do you have a distorted view of yourself and your accomplishments? How did you get over it?

Until next time…God Bless and Good Reading!

What’s Your Purpose?

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I’ve been gone for awhile, but I’m back! Or so I hope. Because of my health issues, I only have so much energy in a day. And most of that energy is focused on writing my fictional stories. That means some things take a back seat–actually a lot, especially house work!  And I don’t feel a bit guilty about that. Writing is my ministry. It’s my service and my gift to God.

Miriam-Webster’s Online Dictionary defines ministry as something used to achieve an end. That definition works for me. For a Christian, the end is glorifying God by adding to His kingdom, both in heaven and on earth. Some of us may think of ministries as church activities and only church activities. They include preaching, singing, teaching,  missionary work, and other church-related activities.

But this is a limiting view of ministry as far as I’m concerned. Any activity you choose to do on a regular basis that glorifies God in some way becomes your ministry.

If you grow a huge garden and share the food with others—that’s a ministry.

If you babysit for young parents so they can have a date—that’s a ministry.

If you volunteer at a school, a hospital, or whatever—that’s a ministry.

When you make a conscious choice to do something and do it for God’s glory, it becomes a ministry. Teaching in a public school can be your ministry if you do it in such a way to glorify God. Being a good neighbor can be your ministry. God gives each of us different passions and abilities and when we use them to glorify God, then that activity becomes a ministry.

I know some of you may disagree (and that’s OK). You feel that it’s only a legitimate ministry if it’s related to the church you attend, but good works are not limited to church activities. In fact, I would challenge you to say that more of us need to step out of the church building to do good works and to find our ministry.

Finding your purpose can change the way you live. It will give you the power to say no to activities that distract you from your purpose which is also God’s purpose.

Writing is my ministry–my gift to God. He’s not gifted me to be a great theological writer. Instead I tell stories. I tell stories that show Christian characters trying to do the best they can in whatever circumstances they find themselves. I write stories to entertain Christians and non-Christians alike, but I write those stories in such a way as to glorify God as well.

It took me many years to get published by a traditional publisher. And during those years, I spent countless hours at my computer writing. Each hour spent made me a better writer. To spend those hours writing, I had to say no to other activities and you may need to do the same–no matter what your ministry is.

This may not be easy and some people will not take kindly to you when you refuse to volunteer for whatever the next event may be, especially if you’re a pre-published writer. Now, I’m not saying to not participate and volunteer for SOME things. Of course, you should, but you also need the freedom to say no when it’s appropriate so you can follow the dream God’s put on your heart.

So, I’d love to hear from some of you. What’s your ministry? How has that ministry affected your life?

MARY ELLIS–Writer of the Day!

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Mary Ellis is my Writer of the Day. She’s a fellow Ohio writer and is best known for her Amish fiction, but I know she loves historical fiction as well. Her latest book is A Plain Man.

Mary Ellis has written twelve bestselling novels set in the Amish community, along with two romantic suspense set in Louisiana. She is currently working on several romances set during the Civil War. The Quaker and the Rebel is book one of the series.  Mary has a free short story available on Amazon-Romance On The River. The link for that is: http://buff.ly/1k10nUH  Her latest book is A Plain Man set in Wayne County–that’s where I’m from!

 

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Here’s an excerpt from Chapter one of THE PLAIN MAN.

 

A PLAIN MAN–CHAPTER ONE

Come, Thou Fount of every blessing,
Tune my heart to sing Thy grace;

 

March, Fredericksburg, Ohio

Caleb Beachy pulled the wagon up to the door; then carried two buckets brimming with sap into the barn. Careful not to spill the sticky liquid, he struggled up the stepladder and dumped one and then the other into the sap evaporator.

“How many does that make, Cal?” Pushing up the brim of his hat, James Weaver peered up from his crouched position in front of the woodburner.

“These are seventy-seven and seventy-eight for today, one-forty-two including yesterday’s for the weekend. But who’s counting?” Caleb winked to let his friend know he was teasing. Then he returned to the wagon for the rest of the sap—his eighth load of the day and by no means his last. Other friends and neighbors were collecting buckets from Weaver maple trees spread over two hundred acres of wooded hills. The trees had been planted by James’ grossdawdi many years ago. The other workers would combine half-buckets together and set them in rows at the collection point on the trail. Caleb and his daed each drove a team of Belgian draft horses to the Weaver sugarhouse, a veritable beehive of activity every January, February and March.

Maple syrup, along with sugar candy in a variety of shapes, was the cash crop for the Weaver family. Plenty of people preferred real maple syrup on their pancakes and waffles instead of the less expensive cane syrup. And judging by the joyous expression on his face, James would still be producing syrup when he was a grossdawdi.

As for Caleb, he couldn’t wait to take a hot shower and wash away any remaining amber goop. “How many trees did you tap this year?” he asked good-naturedly. As much as he disliked the work, he liked James. And friends within the district were few in number since he moved back from Cleveland.

“Over two-thousand.” James straightened to his full height of barely five and a half feet. “That’s a record for us.” Tugging off his gloves, he drained his water bottle in a few swallows. “If prices stay as high as last year’s, we should have plenty to pay taxes and fatten the medical expense fund.” His bright pink cheeks and curly red hair gave him a boyish appearance. James couldn’t wait to find a wife so he could grow a beard, insisting he would then look his age of twenty-five.

“Well, I plan to stay until your last tree runs dry.” Cal offered his most authentic smile. “Without a job, working here for free was the best offer I got.” They both chuckled.

“Don’t forget we give you lunch. Plus you’ll take home a year supply of syrup.” James followed Caleb out to the wagon instead of feeding more wood into the evaporator. “Say, are you going to the big pancake breakfast in Shreve in two weeks? They hold it on both Saturday and Sunday, so it won’t interfere with preaching services.”

Caleb fastened the top button on his coat before the wind cut him in half. “I hadn’t planned on it. My mamm fixes pancakes all the time. Why would I pay money for them? Besides, it’ll be nothing but a bunch of English tourists there.” He lifted two buckets from the wagon, spilling some on his leather boots.

“Nope, lots of Amish folk attend the annual event, especially if it’s a nice day.” James stepped closer to whisper conspiratorially. “Plenty of Plain women will be there too.”

Caleb almost swallowed his tongue trying not to laugh. From his inflection, it sounded like James considered females as rare as gold or silver. “Gosh, I’m not sure I’ve seen one of them before.” He strode toward the barn, trying to keep his buckets evenly weighted.

James followed at his heels and took no offense from Caleb’s teasing. “Will you get serious? Here we are—almost a quarter of a century old and still no wives. If we don’t get moving all the young, pretty ones will be snatched up.”

Caleb climbed the stepladder, thinking his friend might climb up behind him. “What will that leave us—bald-headed grannies in their seventies? At least they should be great cooks by that age.” He leaned back from the heat while emptying his sap into the evaporator.

James peered up from ground level. “Maybe Emma Wengard will come or Dot Raber. Then we could—”

“Are you allowing this fire to go out?” Ben Weaver appeared in the doorway of the sugarhouse, abruptly curtailing his son’s romantic plans. Although his father sounded stern, his blue eyes twinkled with amusement.

Nein, I’m just discussing something with our best employee.” James sprinted to the wagon for an armload of split firewood.

“Employee implies a person gets a paycheck. I’ve only got ham sandwiches with hot coffee for you boys.” Ben set down a cloth-covered basket and thermos; then returned to his own tasks. No idle hands during sugar season.

James washed his hands in a bucket of soapy water. “At least think about going to the breakfast. You need to get off the farm more. Aren’t you bored since coming back from the city?”

Caleb rolled up his sleeves, picked up the bar of soap, and scrubbed off the dried-on sap. Seldom did anyone bring up his five-year venture into the English world. Most Amish people preferred to forget the life he led since leaving home in a fit of rage. “Bored? Nah, I’m not bored. I have a roof over my head without a rent payment to worry about. I eat three square meals a day from the second best cook in Wayne County. I have clothes on my back and not one, but two hats to my name.” Caleb pulled on his suspenders. “And I get to barrel down the road at eight miles an hour as long as it’s not snowing or raining too hard.”

James wasn’t sure how to take the sarcasm. “Are you thinking about moving back to the city?”

Cal met James’ eye. “Absolutely not. The English world isn’t what it’s cracked up to be. When my car broke down, I couldn’t afford to repair the junk-heap. After I could finally afford to buy a truck, it got towed because I parked in the wrong spot. By the time I figured out where they towed it, the impound fees and fines were more than the truck was worth. Without a vehicle I couldn’t get to work on time, so I got fired.”

James seemed to sort the details in his mind. “Wasn’t there public transportation or a coworker to give you a lift?”

“Even if I caught a ride to the union hall, I usually sat around twiddling my thumbs. Construction was slow, and I’m not just talking about winter. Without a paycheck a man doesn’t eat. I don’t know if you ever tried it, but going hungry is no fun.”

James dried his hands and dug their lunch from the basket. “There must have been something you liked up north. You stayed away for five years.” He handed Caleb two sandwiches.

Caleb slouched down against a post. “Plenty at first when I had wheels and a good job. But money management didn’t turn out to be my strong suit.”

His friend’s confusion only seemed to deepen.

Caleb didn’t know how much to reveal about his past. Could he admit he hung out in bars until closing time and bought people drinks he’d never seen before? Should he talk about sleeping with women who were little more than acquaintances? How about the fact he attended church only once during his entire time in Cleveland. Unless he counted church basements that operated as free soup kitchens. No, none of that would help him reconnect with his few friends in the district.

“Let’s just say it’s harder to be successful in the English world. And if a man’s not successful, he’s not going to be happy.” Cal lifted the top slice of homemade bread to inspect the sandwich. It was almost an inch of honey-smoked ham and Swiss cheese with fresh lettuce, tomatoes, purple onions and bread-and-butter pickles. “Do you know how much a sandwich like this would cost in the city?”

Shaking his head, James took another bite of lunch.

“Eight or nine dollars. All I have to do here is put in ten hours of hard labor.”

The two laughed in camaraderie before returning to their assigned tasks—James tending the evaporator and stoking the fire; Caleb ferrying endless buckets of sap to the sugarhouse. But when Caleb climbed into his buggy to head home that night, he felt tired but content. He had helped a neighbor and filled his hours with muscle-building work, instead of spirit-draining mental activity. Each day the sun grew warmer and the hours of daylight longer. Cal had even spotted a robin that morning—a sure sign that spring was around the corner.

Spring would definitely help his disposition. He needed to get out of the house. A man could only sweep the barn or restack hay bales so many times. Once the land dried out, they could start plowing and planting. Outdoors with the sun on his face and the wind in his hair, he felt free.

And less like a prisoner.

His homecoming on Christmas Eve had been sweeter than he imagined it would be, surely better than any prodigal son deserved. His mother had fawned over him for days—cooking his favorite foods and baking extra sweets. His three sisters welcomed him with unabashed affection. Sarah made no mention of his empty refrigerator in a deplorable apartment. She greeted him with a smile each morning, always ready to smooth his transition from English back to Plain.

Caleb didn’t mind owning few clothes. Or the fact his mamm cut his hair to look like every other Amish man in town. He didn’t even mind his slow mode of transportation. But must his father watch his every move like a prowling dog near the henhouse? Couldn’t he give him the benefit of the doubt? Why did Eli Beachy treat him like a shirttail relative dropping by on his way to a family reunion?

He had come home, but his father refused to believe it.

 

The book sounds terrific. Thanks, Mary, for being my writer of the day.